A_R_Road

346 points

184 points to Samurai

7 loglines
13 reviews

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(Having another stab at this one….)

July 6, 2018
LOGLINE FOR A ‘PSYCH-THRILLER’ In order to restore virtue following a discriminatory arrest, a gutsy but ill-fated escort-worker must withstand and negotiate her way through, the next 24 hours locked-down alongside a parasitic anti-social, who evidently knows more about her than she should.

June 29, 2018
When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, his life becomes ever more obscure the deeper he commits to it and the people involved.

June 27, 2018
A remand prisoner is re-routed to a temp facility where she must play ball with her vile cellmate in order to identify her own unwitting connection to the terror attack that diverted her.

June 6, 2018
When a young, British Muslim develops an obsession online with a maniacal and violently motivated con-women, he must attempt to maintain control despite being coerced toward instigating a terror situation on a London commuter train.

June 3, 2018
Version 2 based on your reviews. Thank you

May 14, 2018
When a misguided and socially frustrated young Muslim is manipulated online by a violent female imposter this nerve-shredding urban drama constructs a series of events that entwines the stringent crimes of some of modern societies most deviant personalities.

May 4, 2018

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on LOGLINE FOR A ‘PSYCH-THRILLER’ In order to restore virtue following a discriminatory arrest, a gutsy but ill-fated escort-worker must withstand and negotiate her way through, the next 24 hours locked-down alongside a parasitic anti-social, who evidently knows more about her than she should.

You're right, her own sense of virtue is still there, her moral reputation is questionable due to her work already so perhaps she is?just trying to restore freedom.Ill-fated was a reference to her existing luck. i.e her unnecessary arrest.What she…
on When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, his life becomes ever more obscure the deeper he commits to it and the people involved.

thank you both for the input on this. I'm gonna put it on the shelf until I can delve a little deeper into the concept.
on When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, his life becomes ever more obscure the deeper he commits to it and the people involved.

Would it work better to just knock off the first sentence? 'A simple robbery turns problematic for a cash-hungry escort driver who soon realizes his dark and sinful connection to the victim'
on When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, his life becomes ever more obscure the deeper he commits to it and the people involved.

I would probably lean toward my second entry in the last post, however, change 'recognizes' for 'soon realizes'
on When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, his life becomes ever more obscure the deeper he commits to it and the people involved.

apologies, I was using the word obscured in the wrong context. My intention with it was to show that the robbery had become problematic, the wrong choice of word. "After a cash-hungry escort driver assembles a team of amateurs for…
on When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, his life becomes ever more obscure the deeper he commits to it and the people involved.

When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, a simple robbery becomes obscured by his unwitting connection to the victim.
on When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, his life becomes ever more obscure the deeper he commits to it and the people involved.

I can go into more detail with the growing obscurity?but I don't want to outdo myself with the word count.
on When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, his life becomes ever more obscure the deeper he commits to it and the people involved.

When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, what should be a simple robbery becomes ever more obscured the deeper he commits to it.
on A remand prisoner is re-routed to a temp facility where she must play ball with her vile cellmate in order to identify her own unwitting connection to the terror attack that diverted her.

Following a terror attack, a transiting prisoner is diverted to a detention centre where she must establish the unwitting nature of her connection to the attacker.
on When a young, British Muslim develops an obsession online with a maniacal and violently motivated con-women, he must attempt to maintain control despite being coerced toward instigating a terror situation on a London commuter train.

Thanks for the comments, much appreciated again. The film kind of plays out from two separate?perspectives, I don't want you to think I have overcomplicated the plot because that's not the case. In the second act, the terrorist character essentially…
on Version 2 based on your reviews. Thank you

Thanks for your response guys... So working alongside the industry formula; off the top of my head, the framing would be better suited as something like this... - When a young, British Muslim develops an obsession online with a maniacal…
on When a misguided and socially frustrated young Muslim is manipulated online by a violent female imposter this nerve-shredding urban drama constructs a series of events that entwines the stringent crimes of some of modern societies most deviant personalities.

Is it the reference to the "review like" comment (nerve-shredding drama) that throws you to the pov of a narrator?
on When a misguided and socially frustrated young Muslim is manipulated online by a violent female imposter this nerve-shredding urban drama constructs a series of events that entwines the stringent crimes of some of modern societies most deviant personalities.

wouldn't the purpose be to elaborate an abbreviated perspective of the overall concept??I'm aware that the protagonist needs to b elevated in the description, in this case, the log line opens with his primary involvement in the film .