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The script is based on the question: “If dying was the price to pay for doing what is right, would it still be worth it?”
You are welcome, Elias! Happy to help! :)
Thank you this helps a lot!! I just thought of something similar... maybe they could have been secret lovers.
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I agree w Philippe. Also, why is it important to the editor? Frustration? You need something stronger.
What if they were secretly engaged. Editor gay but hiding because he is ashamed of people’s judgments. Dancer is the opposite. But when he dies the editor realizes he can no longer hide. He must fight the injustice and revenge the death of
The dancer.
There must be something in their relationship so strong it’s worth dying for.
I think the stronger the relationship is, the more exciting the story will be. He fights the injustice - and finds himself in the journey.
And, who is the opponents? The closer the better. Maybe it is his own family?
Thank you for your answer, Philippe, I'll think about it!
Btw: if you're THE artist, I just checked your artworks and I'm a fan of it! Honored that you responded to my logline :-)
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"a frustrated editor" = protagonist
"compelled to give his death meaning, while searching for his own." = main character goal
"recent death of a gay dancer" = inciting incident
Many of the key ingredients for a logline are present, except for the most important -> Cause & Effect.
If this were my logline, I'd consider expanding upon our frustrated editor. What is likable about a mildly angry character - why might an audience sympathize?
I'd also consider what archetypical link might exist between gay dancer | frustrated editor? Implication is lovers (assumption is editor is male), ... "his death, ... searching for his own [death?] ..." all sounds a bit muddily ...
Am reading the final state as the Theme/Story premise: “If dying was the price to pay for doing what is right, would it still be worth it?”
Nice theme, but how well is the premise proven within the story? Justice leads to Death can make a very powerful story - I'm thinking of BraveHeart (1995). While here our noble protagonist gets his head chopped off, there is still a feeling by story end, that is death was worth the "FREEEEDOM!"