When her alcoholic father breaks his leg and ends up at the hospital, the 11-year old girl must find someone to stay with or she?ll be placed in foster care.

Thanks for the great input. I'm not sure where the brother idea came from, my thought was that she asks a teacher at school whom she feels confidence for. But I agree, perhaps foster care doesn't sound too bad, the only bad thing about it is that she realizes she might not get back to her own home - ever. Because when everyone realizes how her life is...
Yes, I do agree that foster care would be better, but if you're 11 years old, and your experience with grown ups is that they aren't that grown up, and that you don't know what you'll get... The mother died a few years back.
I'll ponder and get back to you guys with another logline for this. I just posted another idea though.

Again, I'm grateful for all the really good feedback :-). You pose good questions.

Don't start with "When," start with the protagonist. Should be 'a' girl, not "the" girl. Placement in foster care in and of itself is not high enough stakes; given her father's state it sounds like an improvement. Also we don't need to know he's broken his leg AND ended up in the hospital, as the latter is a given following the former and former is irrelevant when the point is that he's unavailable to care for her...but again, given his alcoholism, it appears he wasn't doing such a great job parenting before. And a broken leg might only keep him admitted a few days at most; does she not have friends to stay with for such a short time? I'm just not seeing the dramatic potential here; perhaps if he were forced into rehab and would be gone for a month or more, and she's avoiding not mere foster care but a particular unwelcome relative, for whatever reason...

@mikepedley85:

What is the story you are trying to tell? The idea has changed a lot and I?m just wondering what is at the root of all of this?

I am also wondering the same thing. I have lost track of the ball, myself. We can keep suggesting different variants of your story, but I sense we do you no good. You seem to adapt and mix and come up with new loglines that may or may not make things clearer in your head.

Can you tell us what moves you, so that we could help towards that direction?