4 reviews
Dig it, leaning towards:
“An indie film star and his reluctant crew must save humanity when an out-of-this-world cameraman attempts to steal the show – and the planet.”
Make this yours, take care.
Maybe emphasise that the actor is in the biggest production yet. For example "When he notices that the camera-man on the biggest film of his life..."
Also, could be a funny twist if the reason no one believed him is that everyone else is an alien too and they're trying to keep the secret - not really a logline addition though.
Overall I really like the concept and think it'd be really funny.
Be careful on the length of your piece, this story could be written at any length.
Aside from that it's a really well written logline.
Putting 'When he' at the start is a little confusing. Personally I would put that it is the lead actor first. Otherwise I like the idea. Nice logline.