WGA Registration Number: 1680921 An older black woman who suffers from insomnia. She is afraid to fall asleep because once she does she is placed inside a real life threatening situation that she must save the ones involved or they will all die. She tries to convince friends what is happening… They think she is loosing her mind and want to put her into a mental asylum to get help…The only way she is able to awake is when they are brought to safety…..

INSOMNIA

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Screenwriters Anonymous 0 pts

Agreed - including the WGA# screams "amateur" so make sure you exclude this from your submissions. Also you need to consolidate your story into a one (no more than two) sentence "elevator pitch". Here's what I've whipped together using your submission and making some assumptions:

"Rita suffers from insomnia, but only because she refuses to sleep where each minute in REM feels like a lifetime spent deep in her psyche. In this dream state, she must save friends and family from death that is ultimately mirrored in the real world."

This is a quick winger, but hopefully it could serve as a template that will need tightening through several iterations.