To save his country from invaders and win the hand of his childhood sweetheart (the king?s now widowed daughter), a disgraced young nobleman must triumph in the Knights League: a year-long tournament followed like a sport by rich and poor alike.

I know this is too long. As I haven’t submitted here, I thought I would put it in raw form and see what you guys think. It’s hard to make the unique concept stand out from the stock-standard setting.

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wereviking 0 pts

Yeah I am after a mechanical analysis of the logline, not whether a story that hasn't been read should be aborted. Thanks. I have mixed feelings about the advice on this one, but it is all helpful.

patrockable 0 pts

Sorry ignore the pitch thing...not sure where I was going with that.