2 reviews
I really like the different components of world-building, plot development, and the stakes. Who is the main character? Who's POV are we using?
I think this is a really effective set up of the characters and the world! All the little details really encourage my curiosity and I am hooked! My only real critique is the last sentence, I believe that it can be more condensed. Perhaps something like 'They take refuge from the law in a container unit' or anything adjacent. I am completely spitballing, otherwise I am genuinely hooked on this concept. Simply slimming it down and making ever word essential will make it air tight.