Death has been conquered, adrenalin drained at the point of death creates the immortality pill used by the rich and privalged. God sickened by the murder of innocents unleashes his wraith on the immortals.

It sounds unusual. I'm honestly not sure what to think. Maybe it would be better if one of the people in the prison camps becomes our hero and triumphs over the evil instead of a soldier sent down from god. That might make it more exciting.

Hi I have shortened the logline, I think ot is a little better know.

I have thought about the story a little more and posted a new logline. Thanks for the advice.