A young man named Angel who is very skilled in combat and lives in a dangerous neighborhood decides to take matter into his own hands for the people he loves most with murder

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Jeremy Palazzolo 29 pts

A young man named Angel is not very descriptive, and a character's name should never be stated in the logline. Is he military? Homeless? Junkie? Police officer? Or a bank owner? Specify who he is; considering he is trained in combat, figure out a way to compile your first line into a couple of words of character description. The event is also missing: why does he decide to take matters into his own hands, and why is his neighbourhood dangerous? Why does he have to murder people for his loved ones?

Philippe Le Miere Logliner · 558 pts

When a courageous, but macho young man skilled in combat
witnesses his hometown decline into a dangerous neighborhood by a self-Indulgent gangster
he must find a just heart or risk harming those round him he is trying so hard to protect.

theme: retribution leads to harming oneself
protagonist's want: to protect community
protagonist's need: inner peace