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When an ambitious archeologist finds an ancient crystal engraved with a hidden message, he funds a secret sea creature who unlocks the message so his brain remembers the secrets of the Atlantis civilisation in the crystal, allowing him to release the Talisman Knights; the so called purveyors of ancient antiques; to release their grip on him.
Quite an intriguing premise so far, although the logline feels slightly long-winded and muddled in the second half. "He funds (finds) a secret sea creature who unlocks the message so his brain remembers the secrets of Atlantis…" – This feels…
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A young man named Angel who is very skilled in combat and lives in a dangerous neighborhood decides to take matter into his own hands for the people he loves most with murder
A young man named Angel is not very descriptive, and a character's name should never be stated in the logline. Is he military? Homeless? Junkie? Police officer? Or a bank owner? Specify who he is; considering he is trained in…
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In 2257, war rages on the planet Aria, a new colony for humanity in distress. The Anunnaki, more numerous and advanced, inflict heavy human and material losses on this planet. At the frontline base, Unitypoint, Sergeant Kane Killian and the soldiers of Bravo Company are on the front lines of the fight against this extraterrestrial race. From the frontline to dangerous missions, these soldiers face the realities of war, dealing with racism, vengeance, respect, and friendships.
This seems more like a synopsis than a logline. It is too long and focuses on unnecessary details that should not be a part of a logline. The logline loses focus of our main character (central POV), which I assume…
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When sent a package containing her boyfriend’s belongings, a conflicted lover must uncover the cause of his disappearance; but when she learns he willingly vanished to pursue space travel, she must embrace selflessness and accept his decision.
THANK YOU so much for the feedback. I will definitely take this into consideration. Cheers :)
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When an introverted man sees a woman in red in the building across from him, he must stumble on a foolish quest on a dating app to find her, but she isn’t what she seems.
Hey Marcelo, Very interesting concept, I think that the logline is a little longwinded and could be refined a little more. Perhaps "in the building across from him" could be cut unless it is entirely crucial to the plot and…
