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Thank you sir, this is great!
Great premise, although from the way it’s worded, it reads more like a horror film in my opinion.
That being said, I made a couple of tweaks just to help make it a bit more concise. Feel free to use what you like and discard what you don’t 🙂
A washed up journalist takes on an anniversary piece only to discover that it harbors dark secrets in a town where anyone who digs too deep meets a sinister end.
This keeps the essence of what you were trying to say while also improving the clarity a bit. For me personally, I also try to keep loglines at 30 words or less.