A misanthropic girl and her rebellious friend are constantly looking for thrills to lighten up their dull lives but when she learns her half-sister has supernatural powers, she realizes having a normal life isn’t so bad.

3 reviews

FFF Mentor · 7,850 pts

Hello,
is this for a feature lenght movie or a short?
In my opinion this could be a quite accurate synopsis for a short.
As a feature lenght movie, I share the opinions of the previous commenters.
In detail, I'm not confortable with a character who "realize" something: this is 'internal', a logline should focus on the 'external' to attract me.

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

Loglines are about action, the intentional struggle for an objective goal, not about lessons learned which come as an unintended consequence. ? As suggested by Nir Shelter, the ?"Training" option at the top of this ?web page has guidelines for the elements that should go into an industry standard logline.

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

This logline doesn't describe an inciting incident (event) or a goal, and as such doesn't describe a plot.

What will she do? Why? And to what end? These are the vital pieces of information missing from your logline.

I can't make any suggestions as the are not enough details to go off.

Best if you define an event that pushes her/motivates her to take action in order to achieve a goal.

Check out the training tab up top for more information.