A hard-boiled bank auditor struggles to outwit a colleague and onetime master thief bent on sinking the bank for perceived negligence that wrongfully landed him in jail.
Ekanem
5 reviews
What is the event that makes the main character need to save her job? This event is what will set her off on her journey, and therefore, it's vital to the story.
The event needs to be significant enough to push a character to take extreme actions, and must also connect with the goal in a cause and effect relationship. In addition the goal is unclear, as "...outwit..." is a generic description which lacks detail. What SPECIFICALLY must she do, in order to outwit the bad guy? Technically speaking, most main characters outwit the bad guys in their stories, so without detailing a unique action? the plot is vague.
In the dawn of e-banking in Nigeria, a troubled and technophobic bank auditor struggles to keep her job but must thwart the sinister plans of a disgruntled colleague and onetime master thief bent on sinking the bank.
To save her job, a troubled bank auditor must outwit a disgruntled colleague and onetime master thief bent on sinking the bank.