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By "relive," do you mean he has to experience the murder from his father's perspective?
>> must re-live his father's murder.
Loglines should focus on the dramatic problem to be solved NOW, in the present tense. ?The dramatic problem NOW is to apprehend and/or kill the murderer. "Re-living the murder" -- whatever that means -- is old business ?Maybe it's a complicating factor in the story proper but it is extraneous for the purpose of a logline.
Loglines should emulate the experience of reading the script, re order the elements in your logline so they replicate the sequence of events in the story.
For example:
After his father's killer escapes an asylum, a fearful book-store owner must kill him in order to save his family.
I changed your action description "...stay alive..." is vague and a given, and "...re-live his father's murder..." confusing - the reader won't understand what that actually means.