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A stubborn, inquisitive anthropologist believes an unidentified body found by the NYC police is a Neanderthal, but her investigation is quickly and ruthlessly suppressed by a secretive organization with links to the ultra-rich.
Great logline. But a couple of comments... Would like to know how the anthropologist is connected to the NYPD. Was she hired by? Is she working with an NYPD detective? Stubborn and inquisitive are good descriptors but don't seem to carry any weight. Are anthropologists normally apathetic and lethargRead more
Great logline. But a couple of comments…
Would like to know how the anthropologist is connected to the NYPD. Was she hired by? Is she working with an NYPD detective?
Stubborn and inquisitive are good descriptors but don’t seem to carry any weight. Are anthropologists normally apathetic and lethargic? Is he/she stubborn and inquisitive in face of the disinterest of the NYPD? What is the character contrast that will create conflict in the story?
Don’t like the word quickly in this context. Doesn’t add anything to it. I think it still reads well with: “…her investigation is ruthlessly suppressed by…”
Nice job, though.
See lessA prostitute finds herself in a futuristic world of cyborgs with four other girls.
Great start, but what is their goal, and who or what is stopping them from achieving it? Check out Blade Runner 2049 for research.
Great start, but what is their goal, and who or what is stopping them from achieving it?
Check out Blade Runner 2049 for research.
See lessLogline . AD 2005 . Ajay. A young man dies in car accident but his girlfriend Maya survived. 25 years later Ajay would be brought back to life with futuristic technology . Will he find his ladylove and live happily ever after with their only love child?
Interesting take on a love story, consider the following: I started with this “Clinically dead for twenty-five years, a trust-fund baby is brought out of stasis only to discover ...” But your premise is not about him doing a job for the people who brought him back e.g., “Demolition Man” – it’s a lovRead more
Interesting take on a love story, consider the following:
I started with this “Clinically dead for twenty-five years, a trust-fund baby is brought out of stasis only to discover …” But your premise is not about him doing a job for the people who brought him back e.g., “Demolition Man” – it’s a love story after that, hmm.
How about:
“A once betrothed young man must rekindle a lost love in order to find his love-child-now-adult when awoke from a twenty-five-year stasis sleep”
Hope you find this constructive, keep going!
Fun fact: I will take a shot of whiskey for each hyphen used 😉
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