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When his wife is kidnapped, a modern-day sorcerer (and NYC detective) hunts down her sadistic captor; but when the trail goes cold and even his supernatural friends can't help him, he must learn that love is the most powerful magic of all, before his wife is lost forever.

July 16, 2015

on After a vagabond takes shelter in an abandon building, he discovers an alien invasion and must thwart it before the walls come tumbling down.

I think this sounds like the beginning of a great idea. I would add to Nir's comments: WHY are they trapped in an abandoned building (why can't they just run away)? Why are they vagabonds? Are they mentally ill? Homeless…
on When his wife is kidnapped, a modern-day sorcerer (and NYC detective) hunts down her sadistic captor; but when the trail goes cold and even his supernatural friends can't help him, he must learn that love is the most powerful magic of all, before his wife is lost forever.

Hey Nir, Thanks for commenting. Actually your take is MUCH closer to my actual script than mine is. MAN, I'm bad at this. Okay, so here's a new take, using your logline as the basis. After his wife is kidnapped,…
on When his wife is kidnapped, a modern-day sorcerer (and NYC detective) hunts down her sadistic captor; but when the trail goes cold and even his supernatural friends can't help him, he must learn that love is the most powerful magic of all, before his wife is lost forever.

Great points, thank you. Needs a lot more work, I can see that now. It helps just to have someone look at your logline I'm finding out. When it sits there and someone comments, it now looks so useless. Back…