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Tag: ?It is said that a mind is a terrible thing to waste?
For some, it is also a very terrifying thing to lose??
Logline: Wrongfully incarcerated, an innocent gay male must rely on his feminine nature to survive as he struggles to maintain his sanity against the uncertainty of unpredictable cellmates and the jailhouse mentality that threatens to break him.
"A sensitive Black gay man struggles to survive while serving jail time with unpredictable cellmates and the jailhouse mentality that threatens to break him."? (24 words)? (Psychological?Drama)I can see something like this working, but I've been writing so long with…
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Tag: ?It is said that a mind is a terrible thing to waste?
For some, it is also a very terrifying thing to lose??
Logline: Wrongfully incarcerated, an innocent gay male must rely on his feminine nature to survive as he struggles to maintain his sanity against the uncertainty of unpredictable cellmates and the jailhouse mentality that threatens to break him.
It's taken a few years and a lot of chats, studying, and bouncing ideas off my friends to finally get this where I wanted it.? The novel was written first, but I started screenwriting with another one of my novels.?…
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Accused of a crime for revenge, a sensitive, feminine male struggles to keep his sanity while incarcerated in a small town county jail fully inhabited by a variety of unpredictable strangers.
Wrongfully incarcerated, an innocent gay male must rely on his feminine nature to survive as he struggles to maintain his sanity against the uncertainty of unpredictable cellmates and the jailhouse mentality that threatens to break him.
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A tortured former artist, now a compassionate young counselor, has dedicated his life to helping other misfortunate souls. As the troubles of a difficult past continues to cause harm, another life he struggles harder to save is just as important to him as his own?
"A tortured former artist turned crisis counselor, struggles to save another?s life from alcoholism in the wake of facing his own past of sexual abuse." (25 words!) Not sure how this version would stand as a hook,? but it at…
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A tortured former artist, now a compassionate young counselor, has dedicated his life to helping other misfortunate souls. As the troubles of a difficult past continues to cause harm, another life he struggles harder to save is just as important to him as his own?
I just want to say thanks to everyone for your feedback and suggestions. I truly appreciate what each of you had to say. I also want to mention that in the process of writing my loglines I try to use…
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Accused of a crime for revenge, a sensitive, feminine male struggles to keep his sanity while incarcerated in a small town county jail fully inhabited by a variety of unpredictable strangers.
Unpredictable strangers, I mean.
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Accused of a crime for revenge, a sensitive, feminine male struggles to keep his sanity while incarcerated in a small town county jail fully inhabited by a variety of unpredictable strangers.
Considering that most responses are focusing on the ?accused of a crime for revenge? part, which is actually an important lead into the story and means exactly what it says, I thought I could delete that part altogether. But without…
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After critiquing a bunch of other people's loglines, an optimistic screenwriter must improve his own poorly written ideas or wallow in unemployment forever. But what seems like a simple task soon reveals itself to be much harder than first anticipated …
Giggles.
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When a biochemical corporation manufactures implants that help millions live longer, they go from pariah to savior. But a longstanding critic remains unconvinced, and must battle the corporation and its backers to uncover the shocking secret behind the technology.
As I am reading more log lines, I find that is is very important to get your point across in as fewer words as possible. From an outside view, I believe that is possible with what you have already written…
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A tortured former artist, now a compassionate young counselor, has dedicated his life to helping other misfortunate souls. As the troubles of a difficult past continues to cause harm, another life he struggles harder to save is just as important to him as his own?
Rewrite: A tortured former artist, now a compassionate young crisis counselor, struggles to save another?s life from alcohol abuse in the wake of facing his own past as a victim of sexual abuse.
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A tortured former artist, now a compassionate young counselor, has dedicated his life to helping other misfortunate souls. As the troubles of a difficult past continues to cause harm, another life he struggles harder to save is just as important to him as his own?
Thanks, Tor. I have been reviewing and rewriting that line forever and I am still not hitting the mark with it. I suppose i am trying to be as specific as I can without giving too much away because I…
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Accused of a crime for revenge, a sensitive, feminine male struggles to keep his sanity while incarcerated in a small town county jail fully inhabited by a variety of unpredictable strangers.
Thank you, Kriss. Your response to the logline says that for the most part, my description worked and I can say that you actually know what the whole story is about. Thank you again.
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After the gruesome murder of his wife, a man takes the only logical choice he has; become the monster that destroyed his life. wearing the faces of his victims, the town goes into a frenzy to figure out who is the man behind the masks.
I see two stories in this logline. The man who has lost his wife, horribly, and becomes a killer himself, and the story of his wife's killer. I think the last line should reflect on that.
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A fast-talking drifter recruits a supernatural team to help him steal Pandora?s Box from Lucifer, in order to be reinstated as heaven?s Angel of Darkness.
I like this idea. It is close to something I would likely read in novel form as well.
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When a prude housewife's perfect son goes missing, his secret life as a gigolo is revealed and the mother decides to pose as a prostitute in order to infiltrate the underground world and find out what happened to her son.
I like Tor Dollhouse's suggestion. It gets right to the heart of the matter by using fewer words.
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Trapped inside a deadly house of mirrors, a copy-cat killer suffering double vision becomes the original killers next victim.
I like the idea of this logline but I would lose or change the 'suffering double vision' part.
