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on A lonely teenager becomes romantically involved with a girl who recently lost her sister, after he fabricates the death of his twin brother, who abandoned him to attend a soccer-team summer camp.

Hey, thanks for the reply! I completely agree. Initially I thought that including that might have counterbalanced any negativity felt towards the protag, as a result of the story being based around one of his lies, but in hindsight, all…
on A young couple travel to a chinese restaurant; little do they know that an encounter with a coven of witches is on tonights menu.

This one is too vague IMO. So the story is about their travels to the restaurant? Or what happens inside? Or do the witches curse them?
on A guilt-stricken teenager returns to his hometown to find out who murdered the best friend he abandoned to attend university.

Thank you very much for taking the time to reply Koen :-) Great idea regarding making Bilak the driving force. Nothing worse than a passive protag.
on A guilt-stricken teenager returns to his hometown to find out who murdered the best friend he abandoned to attend university.

I hate rambling loglines that waffle on, so I was wary of including too much information. But the basic synopsis is Bilak returns home for the funeral of his best friend, Patrick. Patrick's brother, Dida, gets wrongly arrested on the…