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Samurai · 4,338 points

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When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

September 2, 2020
When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.

August 28, 2020
To win the affections of the dean’s daughter, a bad boy rich kid has until graduation to get accepted into a snooty club, in order to prove his worth.

August 21, 2020
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When he learns his wife is planning to kill him, a rich man invites her secret lovers to a dinner party, and offers them each a fortune to kill her first.

July 10, 2020
In a bid to keep his job, a commitment-phobic womanizer seduces his boss’s wholesome daughter, but when she genuinely falls for him, he must continue the charade.

June 29, 2020
After a health scare, a middle-aged widower decides to get back in the dating game for the first time in twenty years – but soon finds romance blossoming with his friend’s daughter.

June 22, 2020
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When a geek loner forms an unlikely friendship with the bad boy new kid, they set out to help each other get their dream date for prom – the two most popular girls in school.

June 7, 2020
The stag night before his wedding, a man is handcuffed to a stripper – who turns out to be wanted by cops, the mob, and her psychotic boyfriend.

May 31, 2020
A man is seduced into robbing his lover’s psychotic boyfriend, when he does, they go on the run – but soon question whether they can trust each other.

May 29, 2020
When a suicidal FBI agent is assigned to infiltrate a prison drug ring, his life is saved by two lifers and a bond forms, however, his new friendships soon thwart his mission.

May 8, 2020
When a bad boy movie star agrees to a blind date, he ends up with his biggest fan – a struggling single mom, whom he falls for.

May 2, 2020
A thirty-something manchild, desperate to get his recently-dumped best friend laid, takes him to a party where his friend falls for a woman who only wants sex, whilst he falls in love for the first time? with his friend?s ex-fiance.

April 18, 2020
An emotionally-stunted, apathetic playboy learns to grieve his father’s death and appreciate life from a terminally ill woman, who loves life.

April 13, 2020
During a Hollywood party, Marlon Brando and Montgomery Clift compete to prove who is the greatest actor – and end up using James Dean as a pawn in their game of psychological oneupmanship.

April 12, 2020
A serial killer is driven by the voice of God to kill five killers ? in order to keep the woman he?s falling in love with, a Christian, who is giving him a conscience.

April 10, 2020
Disillusioned with Hollywood, a movie star returns to her Midwest hometown to attend her high school reunion – only to reignite old flames, rivalries and loves.

April 9, 2020
When a war veteran suffering PTSD goes on a rampage in the woods, his brother joins up with his friends to hunt him down – and must get to him first before the others kill him.

April 2, 2020
When he learns the one that got away is getting, a man sets about winning her back, with the help of the fiance’s ex, only to fall for her as well.

March 28, 2020
When a high priced gigolo moonlights as a pornstar, his sexual depravities reach extreme heights, and he is forced to decide how much of his soul he will sell for money, fame and the love that will never fulfil him.

March 20, 2020
When a playboy becomes entangled with a set of polyamorous, jet-setting nomads – he falls in love with an unavailable woman, whilst a suicidal nubile teen, falls madly in love with him.

March 20, 2020

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on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

I'm giving this one a shot. If it goes nowhere - it's practice. It's experience. Now - bear in mind, I do agree with everything that you're saying. However - at the same time, one must always be mindful that...…
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

Oh - and DEAD POET'S SOCIETY.
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

Well listen... To play devil's advocate here - a lot of the films I just suggested were by Hollywood players. None of which had to pitch or query with a logline. Imagine Joe Nobody pitching HER or FORREST GUMP. (I…
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

FIGHT CLUB? AMERICAN PSYCHO?
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

Out of curiosity - what about FORREST GUMP or BIG (I suppose Big would be trying to find the machine. But would you mention that in the logline?)
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

Scratch MY BEST FRIEND'S WEDDING. That's more an action goal/outside/external objective. HER?
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

Oh - MY BEST FRIEND'S WEDDING. MOONSTRUCK. Basically rom coms then?
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

The idea that you can use a subjective need as a goal as long as it's got a strong hook was from you. From this post... https://staging.loglineit.com/logline/an-emotionally-stunted-apathetic-playboy-learns-to-grieve-his-fathers-death-and-appreciate-life-from-a-terminally-ill-woman-who-loves-life/ We mentioned HAROLD AND MAUDE and GROUNDHOG DAY. Potential examples - um, BEFORE…
on When he enrols in a strict prep school, a rebellious teen recruits a geek to help him graduate, which makes him a target for the geek’s bullies.

DPG - Regarding persistence - as a writer yourself, you understand -- one person's opinion should never sway you. TBH - I've already done an outline using a past logline. All the loglines afterwards seem to be poking at it…
on Three outcast friends lead their town’s residents on a perilous journey to save them from terrorists who scheme to enslave their women for the sex trade

Hi Ben, This reminds me of RED DAWN. I think you just need to lean it out a bit and get it down to 25 words. Something like... When terrorists attack a small town, three childhood friends must help a…
on An American police officer teams up with a Japanese convicted felon to take down a drug lord who set them up in a drug deal gone wrong.

I agree with Richiev. Certainly the odd couple aspect works. I'm thinking the X meets Y of this is BLACK RAIN meets 48 HOURS.
on When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.

DPG - I've been studying this one and only just realized you've contradicted yourself. ** Loglines are about objective goals, not subjective needs. ** Months back - you said that the action goal/outside story/objective goal is not a hard and…
on A high school student becomes an unwitting pawn in a game between two teachers, and she must find a way to outwit them in order for her to get accepted to university.

Hi Byron, INTENTION: get accepted into university. OBSTACLE: two warring teachers. Let's dissect it... When she becomes a pawn between two warring teachers, ** the inciting incident. a teen must find a way to outwit them in order for her…
on A bored Barista becomes a teacher at a school in the town of Homewardsboundsville MO, where students with special abilities are being tested on. He not only has to navigate the strange characters and environment but figure out how to stop the downfall of this generation of mankind.

Hi Christopherandre25, INTENTION: figure out how to stop downfall of this generation of mankind. OBSTACLE: figure out how to stop downfall of this generation of mankind. (quite an obstacle ha.) First off - there's a lot of ornamental for a…
on When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.

DPG - thank you for your notes (and for challenging me and helping me to develop the idea.) I think quite possibly it's the I.I. is wrong and yes I agree about the high stakes. (The stakes I'm suggesting might…
on When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.

Perhaps the problem is the leading line “When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid” - he comes across as too much of an ass. I dunno. Regardless it is still the I.I.
on When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.

I appreciate your solution but I think yours is too much of a different story. Remember - he’s a preppy. He’s one of them but not. He’s the rebel surrounded by workaholic robots (some of which are incredibly hard working/doing…
on When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.

I really don’t understand your viewpoint. This guy isn’t Bill Gates or Zuckerberg. He just comes across someone (the least likely person) who helps him turn his life around, who believes in him at the lowest, lowest moment. And I’m…
on When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.

Perhaps the solution is to zero in on the relationship between student and teacher? I dunno. Any help anyone? DPG - I don’t quite agree with your solutions. But there’s clearly a problem I need to fix. Appreciate your help.
on When his dad threatens to cut him off financially, a bad boy rich kid must graduate his senior year at a strict prep school, only to fall for the principal’s daughter.

It’s the antagonist/shape shifter/mentor/principal who gives him that chance. I think it’s those two arcs that interest me. The love story too.