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86 points

214 points to Logliner

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on Resentful towards his prey and questioning his abilities ever since the death of his protege, a hunter pursues a family protecting a monster they believe to be their deceased matriarch.

As it stands I am much more interested in the family who believes a monster is their reincarnated grandmother. Is the man a game hunter? Why does he go after the family? There are two plots happening in this logline…
on A renowned? but snobby food critic finds himself trapped in a Michelin star restaurant after a snowstorm with the volatile French chef whose previous establishment closed down due to a scathing review he wrote.

I like the premise! It has the conflict and comedic potential. I agree with the comments about it needing a hint about what kind of comedy it is. Is it going to be dark or light hearted? The script can…
on After starting a commune in the aftermath of Woodstock, a group of hippies has to resort to stealing from a hermit chicken farmer. All goes well until they kill his favorite hen… Now it?s his time to kill.

A hilarious premise! I agree with the first comment about the clarifying the main character. Also, just a thought, since they are hippies maybe they kidnap the chicken thinking they are ?saving? it from being dinner. Then the farmer goes…