NeedyGoldfish

40 points

260 points to Logliner

4 loglines
6 reviews

Loglines

When thrust into one of his stories, a timid author must overcome writer’s block and rewrite the narrative in order to save his fictional world and its inhabitants.

September 7, 2021
When his untimely death traps his soul in an afterlife limbo, a distracted jazz musician must find his way back to earth in time to play his dream gig.

September 7, 2021
When she discovers that her dreams are depictions of alternate universes, a stressed single mother must venture into another dimension in order to save an alternate version of her child.

September 7, 2020
When Santa Claus goes rogue and begins kidnapping kids, a cynical 12-year-old must venture to the North Pole in order to save his abducted brother.

September 7, 2020

Recent reviews

on When his son is kidnapped, an overprotective father must go on a long and tough journey to find his son.

This works - character, event and action are all in place! However, it would be nice to get something about why this journey is meaningful for the father - "must face his fears" or something along those lines. Also, the…
on When he reincarnates as himself in Stockholm 2021, August Strindberg realizes he has to learn screenwriting at Story on Gotland to make a living -and there, falling in love with his classmate Siri – a happily married liberated feminist that mocks him for his fossil values and ideas, must revaluate himself and his view upon the world.

Denna vill vi se!
on When things starts to repeat itself and people begin to appear in unexpected places a older man tries to understand what is going on.

This is a great start! I would like to see a clearer event, character and action though. What starts repeating itself? How is that related to the man? Who is this man, apart form being old - give him an…
on When an introverted storyboard artist gets assigned to paint the picture of the culprit she has to infiltrate with the suspected underground network and paint all their portraits to find out who the killer really is.

This sounds like a great concept for a thriller. I do wonder, who is "the" culprit? Maybe specify what the culprit has done. Same goes for "the" underground network, I'd replace that with "an" underground network. Also, a comma somewhere…
on When a film crew is ungrateful on set, a fed up crafty serves up the ultimate revenge.

This logline would benefit from a clearer major event, specifying what the film crew member does to show their ungratefulness. Same goes for the action - what does the crafty need to accomplish in order to serve up this revenge?…
on When she discovers her landlord is a vampire, an occult historian must destroy their wealth to destroy the ancient vampire nest.

I don't get the part about destroying the wealth - does that mean bankrupt her? If so, why? Making that clearer would make for a punchier logline. Also, the word "destroy" is repeated. Otherwise, totally a movie I would go…