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When the feisty pirate emperor kidnaps their kingdom, an abominable feline-human boy and a weak princess must find someone in the “awfully violent” neighboring empire closed enough to accuse him to the emperor’s dubious mother before marrying their queen in a wrestling presentation.
Also, excuse my bad temper. I'm working in it.
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When the feisty pirate emperor kidnaps their kingdom, an abominable feline-human boy and a weak princess must find someone in the “awfully violent” neighboring empire closed enough to accuse him to the emperor’s dubious mother before marrying their queen in a wrestling presentation.
Well, i need more practice... I'm going to review your example in detail. Thank you. PS: You didn't use When and manage to subtly put the major event between the goal and the obstacle. Impressive
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When the feisty pirate emperor kidnaps their kingdom, an abominable feline-human boy and a weak princess must find someone in the “awfully violent” neighboring empire closed enough to accuse him to the emperor’s dubious mother before marrying their queen in a wrestling presentation.
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When the feisty pirate emperor kidnaps their kingdom, an abominable feline-human boy and a weak princess must find someone in the “awfully violent” neighboring empire closed enough to accuse him to the emperor’s dubious mother before marrying their queen in a wrestling presentation.
Sure, help is always appreciated
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When the feisty pirate emperor kidnaps their kingdom, an abominable feline-human boy and a weak princess must find someone in the “awfully violent” neighboring empire closed enough to accuse him to the emperor’s dubious mother before marrying their queen in a wrestling presentation.
Give me some time, I'm editing the post to give more information. By the way, you're being rude. So calm down.
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When the feisty pirate emperor kidnaps their kingdom, an abominable feline-human boy and a weak princess must find someone in the “awfully violent” neighboring empire closed enough to accuse him to the emperor’s dubious mother before marrying their queen in a wrestling presentation.
Come on, instead of stating the obvious. Help me how to improve.
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When a girl addicted to her phone learns that the phone also is addicted to her and won’t let her go, she must find a way to get rid of it before it destroys all aspects of her life. Be it personal, professional, financial, social, physical and spiritual. All aspects are affected.
Don't use "When" at the start? I'll try it too
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Un buscado black hack, se encontrará en una situación riesgosa al ponerse en riesgo su verdadera identidad y con ello su plan en peligro su plan contra el Estado.
. Hi, Milyy. Hope you’re great. Your logline sounds very interesting. But it's a little bit unclear. Let's break it down: 1.Who is the main character? This black hat hacker, who is the most wanted. 2.Where? Is it a goverment…
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A race car driver who comes out of retirement signs up for a televised deadly game show with another driver who hates him.
That reminds me of Death Race 🤔. I would like to see that in a movie.
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A reckless guy with a secret smartphone app must go back in time and undo his courtship with his cousin when he accidentally impregnates her.
Thank you Ben and Odie. I hope my skills are improving.
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When fantasy characters invade the big city’s system, a frustrated dreamer must deal his imaginary robot girlfriend came to life, but when she remembers being someone who was kidnapped years ago by the head of organized crime, they must team up to unravel the mysteries of the other characters past lifes by using brute force and a two-faced mask to cover their insecurities.
i changed my mind, haha, you're right. I'll be working on that.
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After receiving an email to partake in a heist experience, an intrepid engineering student and his friends must work out how to rob a casino; but when they discover the heist is real, they must find the creators and expose them before they’re caught.
Wow. That is actually a good idea and the logline sounds good to me. I feel bad I can't help you much but I hope you can improve it. Thank you too.
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When a naive and shy young man loses his humanity to an evil futuristic corporation, he tries to destroy it to free himself and others with the questionable help of two sides, good and evil, from which he finds no difference.
Thank you all 3 for your tips and cheers! I'll be working on that in the meantime. Goodbye.
