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To save a retirement home from bankruptcy, its uptight director must convince her estranged, obnoxious father to make a significant donation, or face losing her job and custody of her daughter. But when he insists on playing a role in running the home, the director must balance the need to keep her father’s money with the increasing annoyance of the home’s residents with the coarse intruder.
It's a tv show. One-camera comedy. The problem is supposed to go on forever. It's the engine of the show.
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When an indicted small-time thief learns of her boy scout kid brother’s ambition to make their crime-ridden town litter-free, she must spend her remaining days of freedom helping him while keeping him safe.
Is there a reason the thief must be "small time." The reason I ask is because I see more conflict if the thief is a major one, and a greater irony with a bigger thief being involved in a Quixotic…
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When a deadly wave of Coronavirus disables most of the United States and his wife, the workaholic President must retreat to a secluded area and raise his six-year-old son alone while guiding the entire nation. In the process he learns that the former task may be harder than the latter.
I'm sure she's a great PM! .... but I need a hero who is a lousy parent, and at first an incompetent President (a-hem) who learns to be a better President of his nation by being a better parent.
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When a deadly wave of Coronavirus disables most of the United States and his wife, the workaholic President must retreat to a secluded area and raise his six-year-old son alone while guiding the entire nation. In the process he learns that the former task may be harder than the latter.
I hear what you're saying about "tumultuous..."
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When a deadly wave of Coronavirus disables most of the United States and his wife, the workaholic President must retreat to a secluded area and raise his six-year-old son alone while guiding the entire nation. In the process he learns that the former task may be harder than the latter.
Very true, Scott! Thanks for the advice, MF
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When a deadly wave of Coronavirus disables most of the United States and his wife, the workaholic President must retreat to a secluded area and raise his six-year-old son alone while guiding the entire nation. In the process he learns that the former task may be harder than the latter.
I think there's value in white males learning lessons :). Especially Presidents! ;)
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When a deadly wave of Coronavirus disables most of the United States and his wife, the workaholic President must retreat to a secluded area and raise his six-year-old son alone while guiding the entire nation. In the process he learns that the former task may be harder than the latter.
Thank you! Good thinking about making it "COVID-24" I prefer the (fictional) President to be male because of the father-son bond....
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In the aftermath of a school shooting, a victim’s non-athletic father who has given up on life finds meaning in coaching his dead son’s basketball team to the championships.
I like that point about using basketball to distract them, but they really have to learn to deal with their loss.... it's a good midpoint.... I'll consider that for the Internal Goal part of the story....
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In the aftermath of a school shooting, a victim’s non-athletic father who has given up on life finds meaning in coaching his dead son’s basketball team to the championships.
I hear what you're saying about the third act reveal, but I disagree about the end of winning the championship. I see winning a championship as underdogs a great metaphor for overcoming everything if you work as a community, the…
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In the aftermath of a school shooting, a victim’s non-athletic father who has given up on life finds meaning in coaching his dead son’s basketball team to the championships.
This is excellent! Thanks for helping me improve on the logline. The idea is that he had a close relationship with his son before he died but after the shooting his life has gone to hell. His son was the…
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In the aftermath of a school shooting, the perpetrator’s loner best friend becomes a romantically involved with a popular girl who was injured in the incident. Their relationship is put to the test when he is forced to testify at an inquest that he had foreknowledge of the tragedy.
Thanks. I was toying with the idea that he had foreknowledge of the shooting, but due to his insular nature did not warn anyone... and now the guilt is eating at him....
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In the aftermath of a school shooting, the perpetrator’s loner best friend becomes a romantically involved with a popular girl who was injured in the incident. Their relationship is put to the test when he is forced to testify at an inquest that he had foreknowledge of the tragedy.
An interesting point.... I would like this screenplay to be an opportunity for myself to explore the underlying causes of survivor's guilt. As of now, I don't have an answer to your question about why the girl suffers survivor's guilt…
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In the aftermath of a school shooting, the perpetrator’s loner best friend becomes a romantically involved with a popular girl who was injured in the incident. Their relationship is put to the test when he is forced to testify at an inquest that he had foreknowledge of the tragedy.
Thank you. I have a problem because I'm looking to do a deep character piece for the first time. I want to explore the depth of guilt as a paralyzing force - different types of guilt affected different people in…
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In the aftermath of a school shooting, the perpetrator’s loner best friend becomes a romantically involved with a popular girl who was injured in the incident. Their relationship is put to the test when he is forced to testify at an inquest that he had foreknowledge of the tragedy.
Thank you... I prefer the boy as the protagonist, so you've given me some food for thought about how to represent this in the story.
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In the aftermath of a school shooting, the perpetrator’s loner best friend becomes a romantically involved with a popular girl who was injured in the incident. Their relationship is put to the test when he is forced to testify at an inquest that he had foreknowledge of the tragedy.
Thank you... you have given me something to think about.
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An? wheelchair-bound college girl must use her physical abilities and mental acumen to save her trapped friends from zombies who have surrounded their cottage.
It's an interesting point - I thought it would be but a reader who saw my screenplay said, even with the added feature of the friends plotting to kill the wheelchair girl, the hook wasn't good enough.... it's hard for…
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An insecure wheelchair-bound college girl spends the weekend at a cottage with friends where they are attacked by zombies. They don’t know why until she discovers that the zombies were all murder victims of her friends – and she was next.
I agree about the active goal, but the main point of the movie is a disabled girl overcoming her physical disability and emotional insecurity to save her friends (and ultimately herself!) The zombies ending up as the "good guys" is…
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A crisis manager gets recruited by the vigilante crew he idolizes to expose how the family business he is paid to protect sells memories.
Is the fact he is a crisis manager relevant, or does it in any way lead to a conflict or irony? If not, maybe you want to replace "crisis manager" with an description that can create a conflict with your…
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A lone wolf con artist seduces a woman by pretending to be someone else, but must first spend Christmas with her family, whom he grows to love.
I think this is the strongest logline of all your variations. It focuses more on the dilemma of the protag (i.e.: will he continue conning once he loves this family?) more than the?nature of the con (i.e.: He has an?attachment-free…
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A group of rich, snobby college students take their wheelchair-bound female friend to a cabin for the weekend where they are attacked by a pack of female zombies. The students can?t figure out why until the girl discovers that these students murdered them? and they are seeking revenge!
Thanks for your review and great advice on rearranging the logline! The idea is that the wheelchair bound girl ends up being the protagonist, but at first we think all the guys (and especially the main rich kid, her "boyfriend")…
