meensster

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An unforseen event triggers a middle class Indian girl to relive every moment of her relationship with a woman who was socially of another class ? her maid, in order to find meaning in her relationship with her blood family.

July 16, 2012
A tragic event leads Meena to dwell into her relationship with her maid Radha.

July 15, 2012
An event in a young Indian girl Meena, who now lives in America, triggers memories of her maid Radha, who brought her up into the teens when the family lived in Southern India in the 1980's. The story follows the relationship between Meena and Radha from her childhood to young adulthood in the broader social and hierarchical context built around domestic help in India.

July 13, 2012

on Adventures of three misplaced descendants that eventually come together to try and stop the evil society that has made it their mission to destroy the ancient group. With the help of their protector Venom, a rebel Vampire, they will discover their dormant gifts to avenge their ancestors and ultimately save their lives.

a little too general. the first sentence seems superfluous. i think it can be shortened into one sentence to give it that punch.
on A tragic event leads Meena to dwell into her relationship with her maid Radha.

An unforseen event triggers a middle class Indian girl to relive every moment of her relationship with a woman who was socially of another class - her maid, in order to find meaning in her relationship with her blood family.
on A daughter and her father struggle to survive after the end of the world when a war ravaged the landscape 3 years earlier. They live their lives in the wilderness avoiding the city and all contact with people who have become vicious cannibals. When the father becomes ill the daughter must travel alone into the city but what awaits her is even more shocking than she could ever have imagined

too many details. can be significantly shortened.
on An ex-gangland gunsmith who renounced violence after converting to Islam faces an impossible dilemma ? to save her estranged family she must help extremists assassinate the US President

great logline. could "dilemma" be "choice" instead? i think theres more mystery when its a choice to be made..
on A tragic event leads Meena to dwell into her relationship with her maid Radha.

Im worried that its too general to be gripping/ Maybe thats just in my mind. Ive read a few loglines and everything seems to be so dramatic or overly intriguing and I am worried I might try to be intriguing…
on After the head of a giant corporation discovers a malicious conspiracy, he works by night to bring down the very company he leads by day

I prefer the original logline to the one suggested above. Ive noticed that the usual strain of comments on loglines with too many descriptives call it well, too descriptive - they tell you to trim down. Going by that the…
on A stranger turns up claiming to be her son…yet she has no recollection of ever having given birth

I like the intrigue this one line creates. Story sounds familiar though.
on Diego, a 25 year old Argentinian who has been living illegally for the past 12 years in Luxembourg has 24 hours to leave the country.

sounds interesting but the inciting incident must not be cliched. too many illegal immigrant stories out there so need to make sure it doesn't get predictable