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on Lonely woman recognizes on a blind date one of her torturers from ten years ago. After the memories of her horror come back, she decides to take revenge and find the rest of them.

Thank you guys. Now I see two things: first ? my first version was too flat. Your dpg, has more power and is stronger. second ? it is important to (and I forgot about this) describe a personal conflict ?…
on Losing their home and wearing out their welcome with friends, a married couple devise a plan to become temporary residents at a hotel

Think about challenge ? for example: they want stay for free in those hotels. This is a conflict (they vs. staff) and driver for your plot.
on A lonely night time worker, at a weather station, has gotten tired of his pathetic life, whose wife and children don?t even respect him, when suddenly he meets a woman at work who will change his life for the better ? and the worse.

For me, main question is: How does She change his life? she beats with him or makes a crazy deal? or maybe she proposes him robbing a bank. This logline needs a little teaser about genre and of course you…