Lorato

Penpusher · 166 points

134 points to Logliner

4 loglines
4 reviews

Presumed dead, a vengeful old man uses his grandson as a vessel to help the police bust the cult that has destroyed his own life in order to save the human race.

October 3, 2018
After an elaborate conspiracy conducted to lure him in, a retrenched detective discovers a cult that promises him riches but the cult has more in store for him than what he bargained for. OR A desperate ex-cop joins a cult in order to save his family but the cult kidnaps his daughter for ‘slaughter’. He has to save her even if it means losing his own life.

August 1, 2017
After his wife gives birth to a stillborn, a wizard has three days to enlist the help of the state?s only necromancer to resurrect his daughter and break a generational curse that will kill all the female children born into the family.

December 1, 2016
When a witch who is also a medical doctor is left with three days to raise his daughter from the dead, he enlists the help of an ameteur witch who has three days to save her mother from a deadly disease.

November 22, 2016

on After his wife gives birth to a stillborn, a wizard has three days to enlist the help of the state?s only necromancer to resurrect his daughter and break a generational curse that will kill all the female children born into the family.

Creative spaces ?are indeed the way to go. Thank you all creatives for your reviews, you have helped tremendously. ?After your last notes I had to make some serious adjustments to the screenplay which by the way I have completed.…
on After famous NASCAR racer dies, his son, an up-and-coming auto racer falls into alcoholism. With sponsors pulling their support and his money dwindling, friends and family try to help the son overcome his depression in time for his next race.

Agreed with the points above. The son is supposed to be a protagonist but his friend and families are the ones who are active. What does he want? What is his objective goal? Once you have identified these, the friends…
on When hunting season nears for the 20th time in his career, a miserable assassin enrolls in his pregnant wife?s yoga and pilates class to rediscover a desire to kill.

I think this would be an interesting movie to watch. I quite like it. However, I can't quite understand the first part of the logline, has he not been able to kill all along in the previous seasons that he…
on A 17 year old punk, with dreams of becoming a professional MMA fighter, comes to terms with his rage, while looking after a deaf blind boy in a rough underclass community.

Saying he has a dream of becoming... makes it a passive thing. What is his objective goal? to become a fighter? it has to be more active than just a dream. Is he fighting for his dream to come true?…

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