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Penpusher · 85 points

215 points to Logliner

on A fledgling detective pursues a serial killer and is faced with panic attacks when she gets too close.

An interesting concept! Firstly, the she in the latter half of the sentence is referring to the serial killer grammatically, not sure if that's what you intended? I would like to know more about the story and conflict, I understand…
on An ageing Father turns detective to convict son-in-law of daughter's murder

I'm interested for sure, it sounds topical and pulled from the headlines. I think it sounds like there would be great conflict and high stakes. I also think you would benefit by revealing what kind of man this father is…
on Dumped by her wealthy boyfriend, a selfish gold-digger retreats to her hometown and sets her sights on a local bachelor…who happens to be rich…and engaged to be married.

I think this sounds very interesting, and has a lot of potential although the first comparison that pops into my head is 'Young Adult'. I'm definitely wondering what she will do to get her way and what type of comedy…