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After she finds divorce papers, a desperate make-up artist goes to extreme measures to turn herself into her husbands ideal woman, but when she discovers that he actually dreams of becoming a woman she has to face what is really keeping them together.
This sounds like an interesting story to me. May I ask, does her husband want to become a transgendered lesbian? I find her husband's wanting a divorce but then your saying that something's keeping them together a bit confusing.
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While visiting America, a young British academic (who has an inflated sense of his own entitlement) must strive to prevent his liaison with a besotted, underage runaway from being uncovered in order to preserve his much-loved career and evade prison.
Hi Craig. Thanks. I like your take and, yes, a single adjective to state his flaw would be better. Not comfortable with 'pompous' as my protagonist is quite charming and natural in manner. To me, that word conjures up someone…
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While visiting America, a young British academic (who has an inflated sense of his own entitlement) must strive to prevent his liaison with a besotted, underage runaway from being uncovered in order to preserve his much-loved career and evade prison.
I'm entering my screenplay in the Academy Nicholl Fellowship this week. Although they are obliged to read my script (twice), they have asked for a logline. It doesn't have to state the genre. Any feedback from the group will be…
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'The only straight player on an all-gay football team is engaged to the daughter of a disapproving, homophobic dinosaur. With his team aiming for the final, he struggles for his father-in-law's blessing, who just so happens to be the league's top referee'
I like your take on this, Sydney. I think that making the father-in-law actively seek to prevent their wedding ups the stakes considerably.
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A young British academic visiting America and a besotted underage runaway evade exposure by passing themselves off as uncle and niece while travelling the country together:think Pygmalion/Lolita
Thanks, Craig.
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A young British academic visiting America and a besotted underage runaway evade exposure by passing themselves off as uncle and niece while travelling the country together:think Pygmalion/Lolita
Hi Anon. Re: think Pygmalion/Lolita. I think that anything that saves words while evoking some kind of recognition in the reader - and an idea of the film's genre - can be useful when done well. I'm not saying that…
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A young British academic visiting America and a besotted underage runaway evade exposure by passing themselves off as uncle and niece while travelling the country together:think Pygmalion/Lolita
I'll leave it there. Thank you to everyone who contributed sincere, constructive advice. I'll take it all under advisement. Much appreciated. Lee x
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A young British academic visiting America and a besotted underage runaway evade exposure by passing themselves off as uncle and niece while travelling the country together:think Pygmalion/Lolita
I mean - Karen!!! Why would you bother commenting on my conversation if all you have to say is that you possess some sort of superior knowledge. Not helpful at all. Surely there must be others more deserving of your…
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A young British academic visiting America and a besotted underage runaway evade exposure by passing themselves off as uncle and niece while travelling the country together:think Pygmalion/Lolita
DPG, grammatically, it does say he's in America and with a runaway. But I'll take your suggestion that it's nevertheless unclear she's American. As an academic, he has not only his career to worry about but also his reputation. Thanks…
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A young British academic visiting America and a besotted underage runaway evade exposure by passing themselves off as uncle and niece while travelling the country together:think Pygmalion/Lolita
Thank you.
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A young British academic visiting America and a besotted underage runaway evade exposure by passing themselves off as uncle and niece while travelling the country together:think Pygmalion/Lolita
?think Pygmalion/Lolita? What I?ve done is actually quite common. I?m trying to say a lot in a few words. Are you saying that you don?t think it serves its intended purpose or that it doesn?t conform to some rule or…
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A young British academic visiting America and a besotted underage runaway evade exposure by passing themselves off as uncle and niece while travelling the country together:think Pygmalion/Lolita
http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0056193/?ref_=tt_rec_tt
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A young British academic visiting America and a besotted underage runaway evade exposure by passing themselves off as uncle and niece while travelling the country together:think Pygmalion/Lolita
Hmm. You've totally confused me now. I say Pygmalion/Lolita and you think that equals Bonnie and Clyde. OMG!
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A young British academic visiting America and a besotted underage runaway evade exposure by passing themselves off as uncle and niece while travelling the country together:think Pygmalion/Lolita
Hi FFF. Thanks for your input. 'think Pygmalion/Lolita' What I've done is actually quite common. I'm trying to say a lot in a few words. Are you saying that you don't think it serves its intended purpose or that it…
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A young British academic visiting America and a besotted underage runaway evade exposure by passing themselves off as uncle and niece while travelling the country together:think Pygmalion/Lolita
I'm sort of thinking that by referencing Pygmalion and Lolita it's obvious that it starts with him educating her (he's a good guy) and then mid-point they have sex (he's not such a good guy after all). The only thing…
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A nostalgic young writer from Germany is getting his dream scholarship for a US college, but is facing the death of his grandfather and the first meeting with his father after 15 years, and can not decide whether he can leave behind his home and family and friends in order to beginning a new life. But time is running out and the acceptance period expires.
FFF is right. Unless you state in your logline why the young writer is nostalgic, the word just hangs there. That he misses his grandfather doesn't have to be elaborated on in the logline. Lose nostalgic, I say.
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In a leisure female-only Utopia where sex is the only taboo, a willful girl must escape from her restrained community to join her lover who has been sent away.
You don't miss what you've never known. The women could well think they're living in a utopian world. From memory, in Logan's Run they thought they were living in a great world until they found out what they were eating…
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When an out spoken video gamer returns home to care for her injured father. She must enter into and win a video game tournament to keep her fathers farm.
I think Richiev is on the right track.
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An estranged couple decides for a last-chance counseling retreat in a forest just to meet a therapist who reveals their secrets that should rather have remained buried
I don't like 'alienated' or 'estranged'. I don't know what you mean by alienated in this context, and they're not really estranged if they're attending a counselling retreat together to save their relationship. How about a warring couple?
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After his family is kidnapped and sold to English slavers by renegade Fante tribesmen, Ashanti tribal warrior Mwabo embarks on a perilous voyage across the Atlantic to the sugarcane plantations of modern day Jamaica in search of his wife and son, where he leads a slave rebellion against the tyrannical white masters to reclaim his family's freedom and liberate his fellow Africans from the misery of enslavement.
From what I've read, people in the industry won't even look at a 180 page script. Make it your challenge to say what you want to say in two hours or less.
