justin
Penpusher · 1 points
- 13 loglines
- 9 reviews
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Sorry Grammer teacher but your sentence - 'dude, I think you're out with your commas. You defo don't need one after boss' - doesn't make any sense. Sorry but 'Millers Crossing' is actually a real film, the Logline is in…
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This probably isn't a Logline, even though the story sounds super cool. A Logline tells the basic story in 27 words or less, and is designed to market an idea before a lift goes from one floor to another. (…
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It needs a coma in there, as well it would be good if we had an extra word to explain the character, such as - An obsessed, (guilt ridden or single minded) vigilante confronts his sinfull past- blah blah And…
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I think it is a great attempt, but there is a lot 'Cole' in there. But again you did well.
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It would have been nice if we got a time and location of the story. The movie is set in the city of Paris in about 1899, unfortunatly above could be from the middle ages to the Joss Whedon's 'fire…
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Nice. It's short and to the point. The only thing I would change is a comma after building for grammar impact and ' as he starts to incinerate the survivors to ash'. But that is just my spin on it…
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I think it's okay, having the first name there is a good start. IMBD has the doctor's name from the fugitive in their log line and it works well. In the end I think you do what the log line…
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It sounds like an exciting story, but the log line is too busy and a bit all over the place.
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I think it starts off very well and I wouldn't change the first part, but it does need more info to sweeten the pot and give us more insight on the story itself. But all in all it's a start.