Jonathon Nicholas

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on With the help of his undead lost love, a reluctant store manager must return to the island where she was slain to prevent the escape of a primitive evil before the anniversary of her death.

Hi Odie, i actually love this premise. its a refreshing and interesting take on the classic horror movie. for me, these would be my questions to ask: Why does he love her? What is unique about their…
on A mob enforcer who lives by the strict code that failure equals death, meets his match when ?3 million of mob funds is stolen by a desperate young man determined to make a difference with his life by ensuring the dirty money serves a charitable cause.

i actually love the premise of this, but can i ask you something? who is the protagonist, is it the mob boss, or the desperate man? if i were you i'd want that to be clearer, and its also a…
on A group of women back from the dead get revenge against bullies who tormented them when they were in high school.

HI Tony.? What interests me about your logline was the Genre of comedy. when i read it i didnt get that feeling at all, and i think its quite a unique spin. so i would suggest to use language that…