JoelChamp

Penpusher · 51 points

249 points to Logliner

on A devious and successful career Mum is forced to confront her prejudices as her transgender son and her Swedish aupair gang up to provide the requested sumptuous banquet for her terribly important dinner guests..

I'm not great at loglines, but for regular people I think this is quite a mouthful, the constant descriptive words kind of make it hard to visualize the story. Nice work tho.
on Working back late Halloween night, a small town teacher and some resentful students are terrorized in their own school by a masked killer.

I am still trying to get the message across that the students are there to get revenge on the teacher, but all end up fighting for their lives when a killer terrorizes them all. If anyone can help me word…