Alex Cassun

Penpusher · 125 points

175 points to Logliner

on When he finds out who killed his father, a laid-back youngster must return to save everyone from his evil Uncle and become the rightful king

In terms of content, if you're deliberately writing a modern twist on Hamlet, more specific details of your setting are needed to help sell it - "laid back" doesn't really give a clear description of the protagonist. Is he a…
on When his family leaves him by mistake, a troublemaking boy must protect his home from two burglars until his family returns.?

I can see this working very well as a tough, gritty, dark thriller.
on A secret government test places 3 children that have been raised with no human contact on a deserted island to see how they develop.

The situation isn't overly unique so the logline will need to really sell us on the characters. We should know who we are going to be rooting for and an idea of what their goal is going to be. Also,…