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After being lost at sea in the Bermuda Triangle and then finding themselves in an otherworldly gallery of paintings that become portals to strange worlds and other dimensions, will an unlikely group of teen misfits be able to band together long enough to find the door that leads them home, or will the sinister evil that brought them to this new reality keep them entrapped there forever?
Thank you dpg for your on-time comment. I hadn't thought an alpha-character would be necessary for the story line, but as I continue to learn and move forward, I realize that I do need to rethink that point of my…
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High school senior Koa Cohen's battle with ritualistic OCD is replaced by a condition in which he cannot distinguish between his unsettling day dreams and reality.
I like your idea of doing a character study on a high school student who struggles with self-control of both his thoughts and behavior: it's a very relative topic for today's youth. But I have to agree with dpg about…
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After being lost at sea in the Bermuda Triangle and then finding themselves in an otherworldly gallery of paintings that become portals to strange worlds and other dimensions, will an unlikely group of teen misfits be able to band together long enough to find the door that leads them home, or will the sinister evil that brought them to this new reality keep them entrapped there forever?
Here's a quick revision: After being lost in the Bermuda Triangle and then finding themselves in an otherworldly gallery of paintings that become portals to strange worlds, an unlikely group of teen misfits must band together to find the door…
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After being lost at sea in the Bermuda Triangle and then finding themselves in an otherworldly gallery of paintings that become portals to strange worlds and other dimensions, will an unlikely group of teen misfits be able to band together long enough to find the door that leads them home, or will the sinister evil that brought them to this new reality keep them entrapped there forever?
I knew it needed to be tightened up, but wasn't sure where to begin, so thanks for your input.
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When a priest is faced with the choice to either save his nieces life or uphold the laws of his religion the devil himself appears to tell him that everything he thought he knew about god and the devil was a lie to begin with.
I agree with most of dpg's unpacking of your story; except that, without knowing why the priest can't both save his niece and follow the rules of his religion (is there an inciting incident that would clarify that) or even…
