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When a search for Ned Kelly?s lost gold becomes a life or death battle, it is up to an introverted young Goth to stand up to the murderous local cop hunting them.
Hey Nicholas, The inciting incident is when the two main characters are in a car wreck and are no longer on their intended path to Sydney for a big meeting. They get a lift with someone who brings them on…
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When a search for Ned Kelly?s lost gold becomes a life or death battle, it is up to an introverted young Goth to stand up to the murderous local cop hunting them.
Hey Kriss, The goth is part of the search, the cop isn't hunting for the gold but needing to silence the group because he is protecting the corrupt loan agency. The goth has to stand up to the cop, technically…
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Three losers dream of making it big with their online retail business until one of them decides to rob the company's account. The other two find their way out from the angry buyers and hunt down the conman only to discover that he has lost his memory. They must now try and recover the cash or give in to the cops.
Too many words for a logline. Keep it brief and focus on the main story; the protagonists and their main opponent, the hook of the story and the main goal. 25-30 words. Losers dreaming of making it big would not…
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An introverted young Goth must stand up to a murderous cop and free a country town of corruption to win back the girl of his dreams.
Thanks Nicholas, Yeah I did try to get the logline to do too much. I'm glad there's a site like this for workshopping the forgotten aspect of screenwriting. I'll post a new one. Thanks again.
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In order to be with the girl he loves, Jason Blackthorne, a young Goth from the city must win the respect of a country town, overcome the corruption of local law enforcement and earn the trust of the girl?s father; a man he once tried to rob. All whilst being dragged into a search for Ned Kelly's lost stash of gold by an ex-criminal.
Thanks Geno, this is good feedback thanks. I'll strip it down; An introverted young Goth must stand up to a murderous cop and free a country town of corruption to win back the girl of his dreams.
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A Jewish Irish female, influenced by Irish and Jewish mythology and mysticism as practiced in the bigoted ideological, religious and social structure of the early twentieth century, helps others with their lives as she herself struggles with prejudice, near death and perpetual displacement in her journey from wealth to poverty to the stability of marriage and escape to Australia.
It needs to indicate the genre. Is she psychic, as in a supernatural thriller? There is the riches to rags to riches story line there which gives a producer an idea of how to market the film so start from…
