Catalina
Penpusher · 55 points
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Very interesting, I like the fact that he has to teem up with his inner demons.
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Perhaps you should take out the first part about where the incident occurred, I don't think its necessary to include that. That way you can add something that will actually contribute to the plot. hope this helps :)
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Stating that he is blood thirsty shows you what kind of character he is, I like that. But It is unnecessary to say that she is pretty.