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An artistic high schooler must choose between following her own dreams and attending med school with her teenage crush turned boyfriend while struggling to live up to her mother’s expectations.
Hi Odie, thank you so much for your feedback to improve my logline. Been stuck on it for a while now. Hope your writing is doing well and strong. Take care !
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When Santa Claus goes rogue and begins kidnapping kids, a cynical 12-year-old must venture to the North Pole in order to save his abducted brother.
Hi NeedyGoldfish, Your idea is great but I feel like I needing to be more specific about why Santa Claus went rogue because it felt like a plot shortcut. (there is probaby is very good explanation) Would love to see…
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An Elizabethan do-gooder is framed for his father's murder and takes refuge with the most notorious thieves in England. When their leader is captured, he must choose: join them and return to the scene of the crime, or run away and remain an outlaw.
Hi Legend_of, the beginning of your logline sounds interesting but then the second part is quite puzzling. Your character seems to either way become a criminal so what is really at stake ? Who's the antagonist in your main character's…
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The early life and career of the 5 Elements’ founder Rosh Goldman is presented alongside the rise of extremism in the Middle East, while the Rhodium Golems reunite one year after their victory to prevent the resurrection of Project Athena.
Hi Swevius, Your story seems to be interesting but I didn't get much while reading it. I had to search the name "Rosh Goldman" because I thought it was a real person. It is probably the name of your main…
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To save a retirement home from bankruptcy, its uptight director must convince her estranged, obnoxious father to make a significant donation, or face losing her job and custody of her daughter. But when he insists on playing a role in running the home, the director must balance the need to keep her father’s money with the increasing annoyance of the home’s residents with the coarse intruder.
Hi Michael, your concept is great but as Odie suggested, you probably want to make it shorter to read ! Good luck on your project. Sounds like a fun movie to watch !
