Betty Garcia
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Solid, thorough and amazingly helpful. Thanks.
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The first snag, for me, is the word "anoint." An important point - the mom's death - doesn't make an appearance until the middle of the logline. ?You might introduce that earlier. ?"Coping with his wife's death...." or something like…