BenGilani

Logliner · 360 points

170 points to Samurai

6 loglines
138 reviews

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A demonic entity uses a teenager to mock the police when they cannot identify and apprehend a serial killer.

January 15, 2023
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An ill-mannered narcissistic teenage boy falls seriously ill with a mysterious disease and experiences life-threatening supernatural activities after he runs over and kills a black kitten in Dubai.

January 7, 2023
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A blind boy who helps police identify and apprehend a possessed serial killer must now prove that he witnessed the crimes and convince the police that a demonic entity is the real culprit behind the recent homicides.

June 28, 2022
When extraterrestrials who believe humans are annihilating the earth by pollution attempt to take a young boy they have bio-engineered to a new planet, the government uses armed forces to prevent this from happening, as they plan to use the boy as a super-soldier.

June 16, 2022
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“When a young boy is possessed by both a Jinn and a Demon, a priest and an Islamic scholar are forced to work together before the entities destroy the kid.”

February 19, 2022
Three outcast friends lead their town’s residents on a perilous journey to save them from terrorists who scheme to enslave their women for the sex trade

August 30, 2020

Recent reviews

on After a stern Yardmaster contracts a deadly virus from a baboon sneeze, a spirited young girl must set out across town to retrieve a last rare remedy before her father’s illness worsens.

Hi RailGamm97, Here's how I see it: "To help her father fight a deadly virus he contracted from a wild animal, a courageous young girl must set out across town to retrieve the last rare remedy." I hope this helps…
on “The truth hurts. But sometimes it’s inspirational, scary, sad, funny or anywhere in between. After witnessing the physical and spiritual persecution of humanity, a thirty year old man gradually teams up with others to liberate the earth by combating the sinister forces of darkness.”

Hi Presario2200, Here's how I see it: "A zealous thirty-year-old man must team up with others to liberate the earth from the sinister forces of darkness that are persecuting humankind physically and spiritually.” I hope this helps Good Luck Ben
on Young siblings have to use their very particular set of skills to counter bullying and alienation they’re experiencing after moving to a new country.

Well, it depends on their skills. But the term "particular" + set of skills, is more cinematic I think I'm glad you liked it though.
on Young siblings have to use their very particular set of skills to counter bullying and alienation they’re experiencing after moving to a new country.

Hi pinang, I like your logline as it is. I believe you can make it even more appealing though by playing with the words. For example: "To counter bullying and alienation in the new country they've just relocated to, young…
on A group of 20 somethings are thrown into the gauntlet of messy romance when feelings start to get real between co-workers and unlikely friends.

Hi zdoubs, Here's how I see your story based on your logline: Emotions start to get real between a group of young colleagues and acquaintances and they are thrown into the current of messy romance." I hope this helps Good…
on A dysfunctional young man with a history of being unable to assimilate into normal society needs help in winning a local golf tournament and believes it comes from a talking golf ball.

Hi Donn Curbow, This is how I see it: "To win a local golf tournament, a dysfunctional young man asks a talking golf ball to help him win a local golf tournament." I hope this helps Good Luck
on A divorcé redirects his self-hatred upon the very private investigator he had paid to spy on his ex after discovering their newly established relationship.

It sounds great. I like it, too.
on A divorcé redirects his self-hatred upon the very private investigator he had paid to spy on his ex after discovering their newly established relationship.

How about this one? "A self-hating divorcee reigns vendetta against the private investigator he paid to spy on his ex after discovering a romantic relationship between them instead."
on A divorcé redirects his self-hatred upon the very private investigator he had paid to spy on his ex after discovering their newly established relationship.

Let me read it a few times. I'll get back to you in a few hours. Because I personally wouldn't start with "After discovering a romance has begun". I'll give my opinion or review in a few hours.
on A divorcé redirects his self-hatred upon the very private investigator he had paid to spy on his ex after discovering their newly established relationship.

You are welcome, my friend. I'm glad you liked it.
on A divorcé redirects his self-hatred upon the very private investigator he had paid to spy on his ex after discovering their newly established relationship.

Hi Lotcher, What do you think of this? "An abusive jealous divorcee seeks vendetta against the private investigator he paid to spy on his ex, after discovering he has established a romantic relationship with her. I hope this helps Good…
on After revealing her powers to herself and the world, a promising lawyer is forced to join a hero agency to control her abilities and regain her freedom. Meanwhile, after a new law approval, a retired hero turns against the society that abandoned him

Hi Julio Torres, Here's what I understood reading your logline: "To harness her superhuman powers, a successful attorney turns to a superhero society, while a retired superhero takes advantage (How?) of a new law (What law?) and turns against the…
on KILLER BORN

I suggest you do what I recommended in my review of your previous loglines.
on When a promising young concert pianist is overlooked for a gifted new student, she must battle for the attention of her neglectful teacher to retain her top spot.

Hi LachieM, "To maintain her status, a promising young musician must fight for the attention of her negligent instructor, whose interest is turning towards a skillful new student." I hope this helps Good Luck
on After capturing a dragon, a young viking has to defy previous beliefs of the animal in order to protect his people from a much bigger threat.

Hi EmelieN, Here's how I understood the story based on your proposed logline: "To protect his people against a more severe threat associated with a dragon he captured, a young Viking must ignore the superstitions and dangers that comes with…
on When he discovers that he has supernatural powers, a security guard must figure out how to put them to use in order to become a real life superhero.

Hi dbengtsson501, How about: "To become a real-life superhero, a security guard must decipher how to put his newly acquired superhuman powers to use." I hope this helps Good Luck
on When an undercover police officier goes missing, a scared firefighter about to lose his job has to step up to infiltrate the gang the police dissapeared in.

Hi EmelieN, Can you write a short synopsis? It will help us help you. Cheers
on When a sanctimonious woman wakes up to a truck of movers who have been ordered to empty her home, she must barricade the house as long as she can in order to find out why this is happening and prevent herself from becoming homeless.

Hi Sonja, Here's what I understand from reading your logline. How does this sound to you? "To stop movers from wrongfully evicting her and to prevent ending up homeless, a churchy woman must barricade her house and stand her ground…
on Ο ΕΧΘΡΟΣ ΜΟΥ, Ο ΚΑΛΥΤΕΡΟΣ ΜΟΥ ΦΙΛΟΣ

giota1, What you wrote in response to my review is neither a logline nor a synopsis. I suggest you click on the "Generator" icon at the top of this page and use it to construct your logline and/or click on…
on When an invaluable item is stolen from the Royal Palace by pirates residing in the lawless archipelagoes, in 17th century Stockholm, a newbie officer must choose between his duties to the crown and his childhood love who was exiled to the islands many years ago.

Hi PetronellaLäckgren, Let us break down your logline into segments and see it from the readers' POV. 1- It's the 17th century, Stockholm. 2- An invaluable item is stolen from the Royal Palace by pirates residing in the lawless archipelagoes.…