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Alan SmitheePenpusher
When the Hungarian ballroom world champion comes to the US to teach dance to wealthy students, he quickly discovers the corruption and betrayal that stand between him and the fast-fading American Dream.
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In order to better visualize the dance instructor, it might help to add an adjective or two (like naive, ambitious, impoverished, etc). The corruption/betrayal angle is intriguing, but a bit generic. Maybe something more specific (like a student who accuses him of sexual abuse in order to attract the attention of someone else that leads to instructor going to jail/bankrupting him. Maybe a male student accuses him and the instructor is homophobic).
Very cool, but what does the protag do with the “discovery?”
Example:
Immigrating to the US to teach dance to wealthy students, a famous Hungarian ballroom instructor must overcome the corruption and betrayal between him and the fast-fading American Dream.
Keep going!