1. Posted: January 29, 2018In:

    A battered wife seduces a sexaholic lawyer as part of a desperate plan to free herself from her marriage by framing her violently jealous husband for murder, but when things go wrong she needs to think fast and make a new plan before her husband kills her.

    kbfilmworks Samurai

    Thanks for your comments, guys.I have a question that's related to my logline:? in a non-linear script is the lnciting incident found in the actual chain of events or in the plot structure? For instance, in a film such as 'The Usual Suspects' is the inciting incident the ship blowing up or the fiveRead more

    Thanks for your comments, guys.

    I have a question that’s related to my logline:? in a non-linear script is the lnciting incident found in the actual chain of events or in the plot structure? For instance, in a film such as ‘The Usual Suspects’ is the inciting incident the ship blowing up or the five criminals finding themselves together in a Police cell?

    I’m re-drafting my logline to reference the flashback structure of my script and I’m posting it as a fresh logline.

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  2. Posted: January 26, 2018In:

    An ex-smuggler seeks a quiet life, until past criminal associates find him and terrorize his new family, demanding a bigger cut from their last job.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    A retired smuggler must fight back against his former gang to protect his family when the gang comes for money they think they are owed.

    A retired smuggler must fight back against his former gang to protect his family when the gang comes for money they think they are owed.

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  3. Posted: January 26, 2018In:

    When an arcane creature disembowels several Asian women in 1900s San Francisco, a war-weary army officer teams with a disparate group of social outcasts to hunt it down? Only to discover the city council is the real force behind the monster?s bloodbath.

    dpg Singularity

    >>>Only to discover the city council is the real force behind the monster?s bloodbath. That's a spoiler and a logline should never have a spoiler.? The Big Reveal is something a logline should never reveal.? What's going to sell the script -- and the movie -- is the monster, not the politicRead more

    >>>Only to discover the city council is the real force behind the monster?s bloodbath.

    That’s a spoiler and a logline should never have a spoiler.? The Big Reveal is something a logline should never reveal.? What’s going to sell the script — and the movie — is the monster, not the politics.

    Also the antagonist should be a single individual, a Bad Guy (or Gal), not a committee, a group of Bad Guys (and Girls). A group of people can be complicit, of course, but who is the first among equals, the alpha character, who is leading the others?

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