1. Posted: May 7, 2019In:

    Series logline: In 1961, a British double agent, retired and living under a new alias on the French Riviera, must thwart a corrupt government agent secretly leaking information to an underground organisation of Nazis, men he sabotaged many years ago.

    thedarkhorse Samurai

    Thanks ckharper. I like your one. I?ll have to add the date so people don?t think the villain is very old. ?In 1961, a retired spy living the highlife on the French Riviera, must return to his old dangerous games to catch a Nazi war criminal?. Nice and short too.

    Thanks ckharper.

    I like your one. I?ll have to add the date so people don?t think the villain is very old.

    ?In 1961, a retired spy living the highlife on the French Riviera, must return to his old dangerous games to catch a Nazi war criminal?.

    Nice and short too.

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  2. Posted: April 29, 2019In:

    When an idealistic attorney discovers the man she freed from prison is a cold-blooded killer she chooses payback over ethics and mounts a stunning plan to put him back inside.

    Ckharper Samurai

    Rewrite: ?When an idealistic attorney discovers the man she freed from prison - and later married - is a sociopathic killer, she sets him up for a murder he hasn?t yet committed.? Thinking of adding the married part back in for further motivation, tension, and a reason why the characters are even arRead more

    Rewrite:

    ?When an idealistic attorney discovers the man she freed from prison – and later married – is a sociopathic killer, she sets him up for a murder he hasn?t yet committed.?

    Thinking of adding the married part back in for further motivation, tension, and a reason why the characters are even around each other. Because normally a lawyer wouldn?t even be around an ex-client, and this way I can turn him into a violent abuser.

    Thinking I?ll have her hide another victim that he?s beaten into an inch of her life, but my lawyer won?t succeed in that plan. She?ll eventually succeed in setting him up for her OWN murder and get away with his $$ and maybe a child. The child would provide that extra motivation to get the hell out and put him behind bars.

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  3. Posted: May 3, 2019In: ,

    A suicidal mercenary sets out to rescue the girl he was hired to protect, the girl who gave him a reason to live, after she’s kidnapped for ransom.

    Robb Ross Samurai

    No argument there. Normally the flaw or issue implies or touches on the theme or arc and here I figured it's the opposite by specifying redemption. If I were working on this idea, there would be a couple of more logline attempts.

    No argument there. Normally the flaw or issue implies or touches on the theme or arc and here I figured it’s the opposite by specifying redemption. If I were working on this idea, there would be a couple of more logline attempts.

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