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  1. Posted: February 25, 2020In: Thriller

    A young street drummer must shut down a secret cloning laboratory after three escaped wolf-human hybrids follow him home.

    mrliteral Samurai
    Added an answer on February 25, 2020 at 6:58 pm

    Short and to the point. No commas. These are good things. So is starting with the protagonist and keeping the description simple. It might be nice to know what kind of street performer, but perhaps not entirely necessary.Then it derails. Life taking a new turn is a given; if that didn't happen thereRead more

    Short and to the point. No commas. These are good things. So is starting with the protagonist and keeping the description simple. It might be nice to know what kind of street performer, but perhaps not entirely necessary.

    Then it derails. Life taking a new turn is a given; if that didn’t happen there wouldn’t be a story. Too vague. Gotta tell us what happens, why it’s interesting.

    Trio of clones with animalistic features…so there’s three animals after him? Cat people? Werewolves? Furries? What are we talking about here? Be more specific and be clear.

    Nobody begins to do anything…they’re either doing it or they’re not. You have a verb — stalk — use that. But you have to tell us why, or we don’t understand what the story is going to be. Also, “trio” is a singular noun, even though it describes multiple entities, therefore it should have been “trio of clones…begins to stalk him.” But that doesn’t matter since you should take out any form of “begin.”

    How is this enough of a conflict for a feature? Some stray animal folk follow this guy home? That’s like two scenes. What is the story about? Summarize the entire first half of the script up to the midpoint. Give us the protagonist, antagonist, conflict, stakes.

    “A lonely street mime must shut down a secret government laboratory after three escaped cat-human hybrids follow him home.”

    I’m sure THAT isn’t your story but it is A story, and the premise is clear. That’s what your logline needs to be.

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  2. Posted: February 25, 2020In: Thriller

    Logline: A man marries the woman he drugged and date raped. His journey to get help leaves a trail discovered by her twin sister that forces his wife to make a decision between her husband and her family.

    captainryannn Penpusher
    Added an answer on February 25, 2020 at 10:10 am

    Hard to tell who the protagonist is here. If it's the husband, I would maybe consider including something within the logline that might make him redeemable. The "Make a decision" part is a little vague and could use a bit more specifics to establish clear stakes.

    Hard to tell who the protagonist is here. If it’s the husband, I would maybe consider including something within the logline that might make him redeemable. The “Make a decision” part is a little vague and could use a bit more specifics to establish clear stakes.

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  3. Posted: February 24, 2020In: Thriller

    A young graduate, struggling to have a career as a photo-journalist but stuck without job prospects receives a call from a mysterious hacker organisation that wants to recruit him as their man in the field. He works for them while he tries to figure out what their ultimate goal is and confronts his opposing family.

    Tjmohr Logliner
    Added an answer on February 24, 2020 at 1:47 pm

    agreed, needs to be way less wordy.

    agreed, needs to be way less wordy.

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