1. Posted: March 6, 2016In:

    When an abducted news reporter?s ransom remains unpaid, her timid stalker must infiltrate a ruthless kidnapping ring before she?s executed.

    Sumi Logliner

    This is just my opinion - that the key character is not the first person we "meet" in the logline so that sets up some confusion about who the protagonist is. Hope that helps.

    This is just my opinion – that the key character is not the first person we “meet” in the logline so that sets up some confusion about who the protagonist is.

    Hope that helps.

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  2. Posted: March 8, 2016In:

    When a deaf surfer is clawed by a cat he begins to obsessively stalk the cat?s owner

    FFF Mentor

    Hello, i can t see a story here, and I don t get the link between deaf, surfer, cat, stalking... why not a blind butcher clawed by a fish becoming obsessed with carrots? maybe it s surreal ceazy funny movie but as a logline it fails showing its potential. I can see itas a sketch by monty python, itRead more

    Hello, i can t see a story here, and I don t get the link between deaf, surfer, cat, stalking… why not a blind butcher clawed by a fish becoming obsessed with carrots? maybe it s surreal ceazy funny movie but as a logline it fails showing its potential. I can see itas a sketch by monty python, it just needs to be written as a story. give a sense to nonsense and your concept will be a masterpeace.

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  3. Posted: March 7, 2016In:

    When a stranger meets an evasive artist, the artist must give into the stranger?s outrageous demands, or risk his identity being revealed and his credibility ruined

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    Agreed with DPG. Also best to be more specific in the descriptions of a logline, the antagonist description says very little about how they would be a problem for the main character. However if they would be described as a desperate paparazzi then the potential for conflict is immediately understoodRead more

    Agreed with DPG.

    Also best to be more specific in the descriptions of a logline, the antagonist description says very little about how they would be a problem for the main character. However if they would be described as a desperate paparazzi then the potential for conflict is immediately understood. Similarly the main character description is vague perhaps best to describe him or her as paranoid, reclusive or both, this way they come across as possibly baring psychological issues and exposure for them could be disastrous.

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