1. Posted: April 10, 2023In:

    In Quito, Ecuador, an indigenous singer and dancer with powers to slow down or advance time uses them as a resource to make decisions that always make her happy; as she grows older, what she doesn’t imagine is that she will believe she is losing them, thus changing the whole course of her life.

    xtra3440 Penpusher

    This is really good! I’d love to read/watch it. I can only think of it benefiting from conciseness. Things like replacing singer and dancer with performer, and replacing the power description with something like “time manipulation powers” and of course rearranging the other words/sentences to fit.

    This is really good! I’d love to read/watch it. I can only think of it benefiting from conciseness. Things like replacing singer and dancer with performer, and replacing the power description with something like “time manipulation powers” and of course rearranging the other words/sentences to fit.

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  2. Posted: January 8, 2023In:

    A struggling actor from Brooklyn named Safari Zamani and a polymath warrior princess from 10th century Baghdad named Maryam Astrolabe team up to save the library catalog of The House of Wisdom – and of western civilization itself, from being burnt by foreign invaders.

    mariabv Penpusher

    Including the full names is making it a little clunky and difficult to read.

    Including the full names is making it a little clunky and difficult to read.

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  3. Posted: December 12, 2022In:

    An assassin embroiled in a plot against Queen Victoria is psychically attacked by a mysterious cult, flooding her mind with memories from a madman and inflaming her to pursue the cult’s destruction.

    Richiev Singularity

    A bit confusing. Why would the cult want to make the assassin want to destroy their own cult?

    A bit confusing. Why would the cult want to make the assassin want to destroy their own cult?

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