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When his arm gets trapped under a giant rock in the Grand Canyon, a man must decide how much he values his own life and how far he will go to preserve it.
127 Hours (2010). The movie was based upon a real life incident. Noting that in the logline strengthens the hook of the logline. The hook of the logline is that it's a true story of a man who faces an awful dilemma: he must cut off his arm -- or die. It's a do or die plot predicament -- and that's wRead more
127 Hours (2010). The movie was based upon a real life incident. Noting that in the logline strengthens the hook of the logline.
The hook of the logline is that it’s a true story of a man who faces an awful dilemma: he must cut off his arm — or die. It’s a do or die plot predicament — and that’s what the logline should focus on. That predicament was the story hook that attracted the interest of acclaimed director Danny Boyle.
So, maybe:
The true life story of a mountain climber who, when his hand gets trapped under a boulder in a remote canyon, must cut it off or die.
(27 words versus 33 words for the logline posted. With loglines, less is more.)
See lessA “guinea pig” A US Infantry division, formed immediately after Pearl Harbor and populated with middle-aged draftees, becomes the most respected, effective and feared unit in the Pacific Theater, earning the nickname “The Old Bastards”.
It’s got potential, but (and I’m assuming that this is meant to be a feature film), it needs to get more specific. Take the film The Ministry of Ungentlemanly Warfare as an example. It’s inspired by the true story of how Winston Churchill recruits a small group of well trained, albeit unorthodox solRead more
It’s got potential, but (and I’m assuming that this is meant to be a feature film), it needs to get more specific. Take the film The Ministry of Ungentlemanly Warfare as an example.
It’s inspired by the true story of how Winston Churchill recruits a small group of well trained, albeit unorthodox soldiers who essentially serve as the precursor to modern day special forces.
But, the film narrows its focus by honing in on a key mission to infiltrate a neutral Spanish-controlled island and steal Axis ships from an international harbor while avoiding international fallout. You need to do the same.
So in your logline, focus on a key mission that earned this group the name “The Old Bastards”. Your logline should focus on the mission’s main objective as well as the insurmountable odds that the team is up against and has to overcome. As it’s currently written, the stakes are nonexistent.
Overall though, it does sound like a great film! 🙂
See lessOn a normal day, a couple from university arrive in the NY city with same plan for one weekend, but a series of unexpected events happens to them after which their relationship, dreams and views on what they want change throughout a rainy day in a big city.
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