1. Posted: April 27, 2022In:

    While a timid heiress plans to overthrow her abusive mother, a disenfranchised heir to the wealthiest family in the U.S struggles with his responsibility after his grandfather puts his inheritance up for grabs in his will.

    small Penpusher

    I think the logline is to long for me, I'm trying to see who the antagonist is here and who the protagonist is and the death steaks but I get lost half way through, then It just leaves me blank at the end wondering what? Can you change the words to make them more appealing, An insecure son plans toRead more

    I think the logline is to long for me, I’m trying to see who the antagonist is here and who the protagonist is and the death steaks but I get lost half way through, then It just leaves me blank at the end wondering what? Can you change the words to make them more appealing,
    An insecure son plans to over through his abusive mother, an excluded heir to the wealthiest family in the U.S struggles with his responsibility after his grandfather puts his inheritance up for grabs in his will.
    But I’m still not sure what the death stakes are here?

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  2. Posted: April 10, 2022In:

    Forrester´s old Apartment is now a gang infested slum where Jamal has fallen on drunken times, and a genius savant gangster discovers the one man who can make his life wonderful – the famous Mr. Wallace.

    MitchW Logliner

    I would recommend checking out the formula page. A logline needs to have three things: A character, an event, and an action. At the moment you just have a character. Based on your synopsis I'm imagining something like this: When a drunken man's apartment complex is overrun by gangsters he must fightRead more

    I would recommend checking out the formula page. A logline needs to have three things: A character, an event, and an action. At the moment you just have a character.
    Based on your synopsis I’m imagining something like this:

    When a drunken man’s apartment complex is overrun by gangsters he must fight off his habits to take back what’s his.

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  3. Posted: March 31, 2022In:

    A former trouble maker, and a troubled group of his childhood friends gather for an extravagant treasure hunt and to solve years old issues. The best friend of a girl he bullied, tries her best to stop him.

    Andres_ Penpusher

    Small question from my side, if at the beggining of the movie he is allready a former trouble maker what is the character learning in the movie? It will be better to point out the characteristic of the protagonist that will evolve during the story that the one that won't change.

    Small question from my side, if at the beggining of the movie he is allready a former trouble maker what is the character learning in the movie? It will be better to point out the characteristic of the protagonist that will evolve during the story that the one that won’t change.

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