1. Posted: November 15, 2016In:

    Lonely girl struggles with drug addiction after her dad dies. A clique of girls at her new high school influences her to party away her stress, endangering her chances of graduation.

    Richiev Singularity

    After her dad suddenly passes, an honor student gets involved in a bad crowd and increasing bad behavior endangering her chance of graduation.

    After her dad suddenly passes, an honor student gets involved in a bad crowd and increasing bad behavior endangering her chance of graduation.

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  2. Posted: January 15, 2017In:

    when a freedom believer incites his tribe to be , he gets caught by another one to be bought as a slave .

    Richiev Singularity

    I believe the inciting incident should be what triggers the freedom fighter, that will help the reader understand the logline better.

    I believe the inciting incident should be what triggers the freedom fighter, that will help the reader understand the logline better.

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  3. Posted: February 3, 2017In:

    With the raging fire from her grisly past illuminating and burning everything she has worked hard for, the troubled young girl embarks on a difficult journey to find healing and closure.

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    Agreed with Richiev. Good loglines are made up of clear detail that describe a plot. For example "...a difficult journey..." is a generic term as it contains no plot specific detail. The descriptions you use in a logline should inform the reader enough so that he or she understand the MC will undertRead more

    Agreed with Richiev.

    Good loglines are made up of clear detail that describe a plot. For example “…a difficult journey…” is a generic term as it contains no plot specific detail. The descriptions you use in a logline should inform the reader enough so that he or she understand the MC will undertake a difficult journey instead of literally wording it in the logline.

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