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A Estranged Father is kidnapped by his business partner in NYC, He must escape to reconcile with his kids or die regarding in a small old apartment.
I just have some questions and food for thought, not necessarily to include?in the logline but about the plot which may inform the reworking of the logline... * I wouldn't have the word 'estranged' as the second word or as a description of the main character. It seems out of place here, (but I underRead more
I just have some questions and food for thought, not necessarily to include?in the logline but about the plot which may inform the reworking of the logline…
* I wouldn’t have the word ‘estranged’ as the second word or as a description of the main character. It seems out of place here, (but I understand that you are trying to set up the fact that the man has issues with his kids).
See less* Why is the father kidnapped by his business partner? Does the business partner have any connection to the father’s kids and why he is estranged?
* He needs to escape regardless whether he needs to reconcile with his kids or not, however, is he racing against time? Does he have a small window of opportunity to see his kids and if he doesn’t do it in that time then all will be lost?
A find of ancient coins triggers a cold case investigation back to Nazi Germany, which culminates in a hot chase of a Gestapo officers murdering grandson.
What Richiev said. Also, loglines are meant to describe plots and a plot is best defined within a finite amount of time - a start point and an end point. The start here, or the inciting incident, is the coins being found but what is the end point or goal? What will the characters in this story strivRead more
What Richiev said.
Also, loglines are meant to describe plots and a plot is best defined within a finite amount of time – a start point and an end point. The start here, or the inciting incident, is the coins being found but what is the end point or goal? What will the characters in this story strive to achieve?
See lessA selfish billionaire businessman went to NYC were he got kidnapped by his opponents, and left to die in a small old room.
Great comment by Richiev. Feel free to check out the 'Formula' tab up top for more information on how best to structure loglines.
Great comment by Richiev.
Feel free to check out the ‘Formula’ tab up top for more information on how best to structure loglines.
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