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When his son dies, a distraught and vengeful dad must accept that the death was an accident and not a murder.
>>>>must accept that the death was an accident and not a murder.Seems to be a spoiler giving away the solution to the mystery: ?was it an accident or a crime covered up to appear as an accident? ?And a logline should never contain a spoiler, give away the Big Reveal or the ending.The logRead more
>>>>must accept that the death was an accident and not a murder.
Seems to be a spoiler giving away the solution to the mystery: ?was it an accident or a crime covered up to appear as an accident? ?And a logline should never contain a spoiler, give away the Big Reveal or the ending.
The logline needs to be framed in terms of the father’s initial (end of Act 1) objective goal, not his final (Act 3) realization.
And btw: ?the best plots are torture racks designed to make the protagonist suffer, to force them into confessing a ?secret truth about themselves. ?Ergo, in struggling to discover the truth about his son’s death (objective goal), the father should be forced to realize and confess an unpleasant truth about himself (subjective need).
Again, “Ordinary People” is a model movie of a family on the torture rack after the accidental death of a beloved family member.
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See lessHelped by her friends, a shy teenager finds success in an underground art world, but is left struggling when treatment for her mental illness strips her of both her best friend and her creativity.
Agree with Richiev. ?As currently framed, the logline seems to doom her to failure. ?It ends on a down beat:"... is left struggling when treatment for her mental illness..." The logline needs to be framed in terms of her objective goal. ?Which is to recover, resume her artistic dream in spite of herRead more
Agree with Richiev. ?As currently framed, the logline seems to doom her to failure. ?It ends on a down beat:”… is left struggling when treatment for her mental illness…”
The logline needs to be framed in terms of her objective goal. ?Which is to recover, resume her artistic dream in spite of her mental disorder.
What is her mental problem anyway? ?Schizophrenia? ?Bipolar disorder? ?I think the logline should be specific on that point, not vague. ?A movie producer reading the logline will want to know what the particular personal demon she is wrestling with before they decide to read the script.
See lessTwo ex-Navy divers fight both dread and fear as they are commissioned by the War Dept. to dive on the ship they served on, the USS Arizona.
The Pearl Harbor-- Arizona has been down for a very long time, so the better setting for this would be a few years after the end of WWII. What this log fails to mention is why are they diving down there? It's not that much of a risk to go there at it's present depth.
The Pearl Harbor– Arizona has been down for a very long time, so the better setting for this would be a few years after the end of WWII.
What this log fails to mention is why are they diving down there? It’s not that much of a risk to go there at it’s present depth.
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