HeatherCates:

Actually, I think it more accurate to say that loglines needs to be specific — in as few words as possible.? No easy assignment, to be sure.

Specifically an ideal logline includes: 1] A protagonist with a? 2]? defining character strength or debilitating character flaw, who 3] pursues a specific objective goal? 4] in the face of overwhelming external obstacles, danger and suffering.

In the case of your logline,? the problem with “self-discovery” is? two-fold. First of all, it’s a vague term — “self-discovery” can mean, well, anything.? And if a word or phrase can mean anything then in a logline it means nothing.

Second, “self-discovery” is not an objective goal.? Rather it, refers to a subjective need.? “Self-discovery” refers to an invisible process that happens inside her head.? But film is a visual medium, which means that the process of “self-discovery” must be? made visible; to wit, it must be externalized.? And the way to do that is to visualize the internal process in terms of an external struggle for a specific external object or specific end goal.

If her internal need is to self-actualize, then what is the external means she goes about to satisfy that need?? What is the specific objective goal she sets for herself to resolve her internal need?

As an example, take the movie “Wild” (2014). It was based on the true story of a woman with a desperate subjective need to heal herself from her psychological — internal, invisible — wounds, many of them self-inflicted.? So, on the subjective (invisible) level, it’s the story of a woman’s process of self-healing.

And what is the external means by which she chose to heal herself?? She decided to do a solo hike of the Pacific Crest Trail. That became her objective goal.? ?It’s a goal fraught with? towering obstacles, real danger and frequent suffering.

It’s also a goal that can be visualized in a film.? The movie ends with a shot of her crossing the River of the Gods in Washington State. Objective goal reached!? And we know that in order for her to succeed externally, she had to heal herself internally. That’s the way it works in drama:? an external objective goal can only be achieved after resolving the internal emotional issue.

But, to repeat, the logline would be? focused on, framed in terms of her objective goal — not the subjective need: Thus:

The true story of a woman’s 1,100-mile solo hike of the Pacific Crest trail to recover from personal tragedy and drug addiction.? (22 words)

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